June’s writing prompt from the AbsoluteWrite forum is “Write a location description, and make us feel as if we are there. No dialogue, no introductory comments, just a location. We’re the tourists, you’re the guide.”
While I didn’t exactly follow the instructions (yeah, yeah no surprise) I have to credit this along with Book TV’s show Writers Confessions for planting the seed for a new book.
What follows is the raw first steps of a new novel. It is, as always, subject to change over time. No story has ever presented itself to me in its full glory. It morphs, the characters flesh out and change but mostly the initial premise remains intact.
It will be of no big surprise that this is yet another foray into the dark corners of the human mind, my favorite playground.
Oh, how did I break the rules? I do have two lines of dialogue. Ok, not dialogue per se, more monologue and if I remember correctly the rules didn’t state ‘no monologue’ 😉 Oh, and I’m not big on lots of description. I feel that a reader filling in the appropriate gaps paints a much more vivid picture than my meagre English skills allow.
The wind whipped the snow blanketing the peaks into a blinding white curtain. It howled and gnashed leaving reminders of its fury in the very rock of the mountains upon which he stood. It tore at his hair and clothes threatening to upset his balance and send him tumbling into the craggy depths below.
Yet he stood and accepted its wrath. He drank it in. He looked down at the valley nested between the base of the mountains; green and fertile but still small and fragile. Like a colourful ant among the feet of giants. Even the air had a cold sweetness to it.
He knew it was all an illusion. The ‘quiet place’ he had dreamed up to escape. In fact even over the roar of the wind, he could hear their whispers. Though the sun shone cold and pale, the darkness of reality fogged the edges. He stretched his arms wide as if to reach out and touch everything he could see but the hard edge of the cot, the cold dampness of the concrete block pressed into his back.
He tried to stretch further, until it felt like his arms would surely pop out of their sockets, desperate to hold onto the jagged rocks, the ice blue sky, the white of the snow, even the green of the valley below but the grey bled in. The scene faded to small colourful flecks that flashed behind his eyelids; his balled fists pressed against them as he huddled in the corner. The stench of urine and body odour assailed his nose.
The caterwauling of his neighbours replaced the wind and he moved his hands to his ears to shut it out. Even through cupped hands the voices leaked in.
The voices ignored his plea; instead they hurled curses and jibes in his direction. Sing-song chants of mocking bounced around his small space. Off the concrete walls, the solitary cot, the stained toilet and the metal bars.
“Go away! Leave me alone. Just leave me alone…” his words trailed off. “I don’t belong here. No, not here.”
The flecks behind his eyes morphed into a colourful mass. They swirled and changed. His heart lifted but instead of the wind scared rocks and towering peaks the image of a broken body emerged. He knelt next to it as the sky pulsed red and feet thundered around him. His hands held out in front of him, drenched in blood, the same blood that pooled around the body and stained its long golden tresses. The floral summer dress, once vibrant as it hugged her curves with its floral pattern, now soiled and torn, limp and lifeless. Her eyes continued to stare through him as the hands roughly lifted him away.
Away to here.
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orion_mk3 – http://nonexistentbooks.wordpress.com (link to this month’s post)
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