January AW Blog Chain

It’s that  time again. Time for the Absolute Write blog chain. This month’s prompt is Winter Nightmare.

As most of you know, I’ve been having computer problems, but that’s no excuse for what I’m about to do. The truth is, I entered late and at the time my creative juices were percolating elsewhere. So instead of backing out, I thought I’d resurrect an old piece, blow the dust of it, so to speak.

The piece is Snow Blind. Some of you may remember it from the Uxbridge Celebration of the Arts Festival. I stood in front of a sparse crowd and read it aloud. That was September 2010. Since then I have increased my readership here. So if you’ve read it before, please excuse me.

If it helps, next month’s potential prompt is second chances. I have written a short story for it called Second Chances Don’t Come Cheap. Sadly it is too long for February’s blog chain. The bright side is, I plan to submit it to a writing contest.. as soon as I find one, that is.

So without further ado, here is Snow Blind. As always, please check out the other participants entries. There is something for everyone including non-fiction. Enjoy


Snow robs the dark of its sight stealing powers and yet, during the day, this very illuminator has the same properties as the darkest night.

Black and white, white and black, opposites and yet they share the same qualities, the same abilities. Both in essence are colours and yet they are, by definition, the absence of colour.

Isn’t it funny how the mind works when faced with adversity? A vast ice plain stretches out before me, behind me, to all sides and yet here I am debating where black and white stand in a colour wheel.

I repeat a litany: “legs keep moving”, “don’t stop”, “legs keep moving”, each phrase torn from my frozen lips by the howling wind and shredded by the driving snow.

All this whiteness robs ones rationality, takes away sense of direction, I don’t know where I am, where I’m going or where I’ve been but what I do know for sure is that if I stop, I’m dead. Maybe I’m dead already. Maybe this is my hell for stealing my uncle’s Playboys; a total absence of all senses. I can’t feel my hands, my feet, I can’t see anything but white and I can’t hear anything except the howl of the wind. Even that is white.

“Don’t stop, keep walking.”


All this white reminds of strawberries, more specifically, the creamy vanilla ice-cream over which my mom would ladle spoonfuls of home-made strawberries jam, still warm from the canning process. I can almost smell the pot bubbling on the stove.

The jam would melt the ice-cream, if I didn’t eat it fast enough, which I wouldn’t, making delicious, sweet pink slurry.

Man, my imagination is so strong I can actually see it…

No, that’s not strawberries. It can’t be. Strawberries are spooned on carefully, never sprayed on like this, plus, it’s the wrong colour. This red is a deep red, almost black, like… blood. It has to be blood! Someone has been here before me, but why can’t I still see them? It’s snowing so hard but the blood looks so fresh.

“Hello?!” My call sounds muffled. I try to call again and the red splatters grow. It’s blood, my blood.

Why am I not moving? Why is my face pressed into the strawberries and ice-cream? No more, please mom, I’m so sleepy. Even the snow is tired of being so white all the time, it’s fading to grey, to bla…

Participants and posts:
orion_mk3 – http://nonexistentbooks.wordpress.com (link to this month’s post)
MamaStrong – http://writingofme.blogspot.com/ (link to this month’s post)
pyrosama – http://matrix-hole.blogspot.com/ (link to this month’s post)
Turndog-Millionaire – http://turndog-millionaire.com/ (link to this month’s post)
Alpha Echo – http://aprilplummer81.blogspot.com/ (link to this month’s post)
LilGreenBookworm – http://themayhemofwritingsahm-style.blogspot.com/ (link to this month’s post)
Domoviye – http://lets-get-happy.blogspot.com/ (link to this month’s post)
writingismypassion – http://charityfaye.blogspot.com/ (link to this month’s post)
kimberlycreates – http://www.kimberlycreates.com/ (link to this month’s post)
Suzanne Seese – http://viewofsue.blogspot.com/ (link to this month’s post)
Diana Rajchel – http://blog.dianarajchel.com/ (link to this month’s post)
Ralph Pines – http://ralfast.wordpress.com/ (link to this month’s post)
Alynza – http://www.alynzasmith.blogspot.com/ (link to this month’s post)
Literateparakeet – http://lesliesillusions.blogspot.com/ (link to this month’s post)
in_one – http://quirkythomas.blogspot.com/ (link to this month’s post)
Tomspy77 – http://thomaswillamspychalski.wordpress.com/ (link to this month’s post)
Inkstrokes – https://drlong67.wordpress.com/ (You are here!)
kiwiviktor81 – http://storygenerator.net/ (link to this month’s post)
These Mean Streets – http://ohno-anotherwritingblog.blogspot.com/ (link to this month’s post)
areteus – http://lurkingmusings.wordpress.com/ (link to this month’s post)
Abielle Rose – http://stainedglassinthenight.wordpress.com/ (link to this month’s post)

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About Dale Long

Writing ambushed me from the shadows. At first I pushed it aside as nonsense, but luckily my wife and two girls saw the potential. Since then I have had an article published by Metroland, placed as runner-up and in the top ten in humour writing contests and various other contests. The icing on the cake was placing as runner-up in the WCDR's Wicked Words contest (130 entries) and having my entry published in the contests anthology of the same name. My entry was an exerpt from my upcoming novel, Echoes.
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27 Responses to January AW Blog Chain

  1. deepamwadds says:

    Who shot JR?? I’d say this makes a great beginning, but only if then we go on a Lovely Bones sort of journey. I could taste those berries! Then I spit them out real quick.

    • Dale Long says:

      Can’t tell that Lost in the Wilderness was one of my favorite books growing up can you 😉 I didn’t read that book I ate it up. I lived in those pages.

      A great beginning hunh? Hmm….

  2. ruthewalker says:

    Completely creepy Dale. I’m not eating strawberries this week at all. But ice cream. Well…

  3. Love this, the descriptions are amazing. From the strawberries to the snow, and the debate over Black and White is great. Love it love it!!

    Very nicely done, and if there was a winner for the AW Blog Chain, which there isn’t, i’d say this would be up there. Right at the top of the cold wintery mountain

    Matt (Turndog Millionaire)

  4. alexp01 says:

    Creepy and evocative. Well done! I do hope you’ll at least favor us with an excerpt from your “Second Chances” story so we can gt an idea of where the inspiration took you.

    • Dale Long says:

      Thanks Alex.
      I may do just that. It’s a Twilight Zone-ish story. Still needs a bit of polish but it was fun to write. It’s always a rush when your pens seem filled with lightning.

  5. tomspy77 says:

    I like it but I will admit I would love to know what the red was..but i guess that was the point wasn’t it? 🙂

    • Dale Long says:


      I love one word sentences. 😉

      Thanks Tom. If I can get the reader to think or bit inspired to know more about the subject I’m writing about because of my writing, I feel I’ve done my job.

  6. I can’t move. The whole time I was reading it…I couldn’t move, frozen legs.



  7. *shudder* Hypothermia is scary stuff, man.

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  9. Bill says:

    Evocative and gruesome. A fitting and well-told tale for this month’s prompt. I enjoyed it very much. Thank you.

  10. Dale Long says:

    No, thank-you, Bill!

    It’s fun being part of these blog chains with all the great writers.

  11. Wow, I didn’t see that coming. Blood. Way cool post.
    I plan to resurrect a post for the Second Chances Feb. chain because when I think second chance it’s the only thing that comes to my mind. I can sweep it away.

  12. Leslie says:

    Like Bill said, evocative and gruesome. Good job!

  13. Oh my! What a great beginning! Lulling us into this false sense of security with the warm strawberries, then that shocker of an ending. Love it!

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  15. Snellopy says:

    I loved the way that his mind wandered to distract himself from the unpleasant situation with a cherished, happy memory. It made me think that he might actually make it through.

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